IELTS Essay Bank · Task 2 Academic · Opinion (agree/disagree)
Banning Junk Food Advertising to Children: Band 8 Sample Essay
347 words · Topic: Media & advertising, Health ·
The question
Manufacturers of sugary snacks and fizzy drinks frequently target their advertising at young children through television, apps and social media.
To what extent do you agree or disagree that this kind of advertising should be banned completely?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Band 8 sample essay
Highlighted = useful vocabularySnack and soft-drink manufacturers have always courted young consumers, but the move to apps, games and social media has made their marketing more pervasive and harder for parents to monitor. I agree that advertising of this kind should be banned outright, since it exploits children's inability to judge persuasive messages and contributes to a health problem that the society as a whole ends up paying for.
The central objection to such advertising is that it is fundamentally unfair. Adults can recognise a commercial as an attempt to sell them something and weigh it accordingly, but young children largely lack this capacity; to them, a cheerful mascot promoting a sugary cereal is simply entertainment. Online marketing blurs the line further by embedding brands in games and videos, so that the persuasive intent is almost invisible. Directing sophisticated campaigns at an audience that cannot recognise them is less a matter of free commerce than of exploiting a vulnerability.
The consequences are also serious. Dietary habits formed in childhood tend to persist into adulthood, and a high intake of sugar is closely associated with obesity, type 2 diabetes and tooth decay. Advertising does not merely shift children between brands; it normalises occasional treats as everyday food, and the resulting costs fall on families and health systems for decades.
Critics contend that a ban infringes on commercial freedom and that responsibility lies with parents. Parental guidance certainly matters, but it is unrealistic to expect parents to screen every video and game their children encounter. Nor would a partial restriction suffice: limiting television advertising alone would simply displace spending to less regulated digital channels. Only a comprehensive ban covering every medium closes these loopholes, and Quebec in Canada, which has restricted advertising aimed at children for over four decades, suggests that such a policy is both workable and enforceable.
In short, marketing unhealthy food to young children takes advantage of their immaturity at the expense of their long-term health. A complete ban is not an overreaction but a proportionate response to a clear imbalance of power between advertisers and their youngest audience.
Word count: 347
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Why this is Band 8: criterion by criterion
Task Response
Band 8The prompt is fully addressed with a clear, well-supported position that a complete ban is justified. Each main idea is extended logically: the unfairness argument moves from children's cognitive limits to the hidden nature of online marketing, and the health argument links childhood habits to long-term costs. Crucially, the essay explains why the ban must be complete ("limiting television advertising alone would simply displace spending"), and the Quebec example supports the claim that it is practical. For Band 9, the commercial-freedom objection could be weighed a little more seriously before being rejected.
Coherence and Cohesion
Band 8Ideas are sequenced logically, and cohesion is managed skilfully through reference and sentence structure: "this capacity", "The consequences are also serious", "these loopholes". The fronted negative "Nor would a partial restriction suffice" links the rebuttal to the previous sentence without a stock connector. Each paragraph has a clear purpose and paragraphing is appropriate throughout. This fully meets the Band 8 descriptor.
Lexical Resource
Band 8A wide range of vocabulary is used fluently and precisely: "courted young consumers", "pervasive", "persuasive intent", "blurs the line", "a proportionate response", "a clear imbalance of power". Less common items are used naturally and with good awareness of collocation ("weigh it accordingly", "infringes on commercial freedom", "closes these loopholes"). There are no errors in word choice or spelling, so Band 8 is secure; Band 9 would require slightly more varied reference to children than "young children" and "their children".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Band 8The essay displays a wide range of structures used accurately: a semicolon introducing an explanation, a "less … than" comparison, negative inversion ("Nor would a partial restriction suffice"), non-defining relative clauses and a "not … but" contrast in the conclusion. The great majority of sentences are error-free. There is one article error — "the society as a whole" should be society as a whole, without the — which is the kind of very occasional slip Band 8 allows.
Useful vocabulary and collocations
- persuasive intent
- the purpose of trying to persuade someone; a key concept in arguments about children and advertising.
- exploiting a vulnerability
- taking unfair advantage of a weakness; a strong evaluative phrase.
- dietary habits formed in childhood
- a precise, formal noun phrase with a reduced relative clause.
- displace spending
- move money from one place to another; used here for advertising budgets.
- both workable and enforceable
- practical and possible to police; useful for evaluating any policy.
How this essay could reach Band 9
- 1Engage more seriously with the strongest counter-argument — for example, acknowledge that companies also fund children's television and apps through advertising — before explaining why a ban is still justified.
- 2Correct the one article slip (society as a whole); at Band 9 errors occur only as rare slips.
- 3Vary the reference to the audience (young viewers, under-twelves, minors) to show the full flexibility of your vocabulary.
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